Two papers in...

While writing these two papers i realized that my writing for the most part in the past has all been the same, Followed a strict 3,5 or 10 paragraph format and these two papers helped me break out of that format. Neither of these papers allowed my to follow this format that i was use to and  I was frustrated with this at first but the more i revise the papers the more i realized that it is not that hard its just uncomfortable at first. Once i start revising and getting the hang of the paper these nonconventional papers to me are easier to write. Ive also learned a lot about how much you can write on such a small amount of given information.

Revamped analysis paper and final paper

Wow was that a couple of late nights working on the paper. One i figured out the quote sandwich i was able to write a paper that was just over 5 pages. It was a paragraph over 5 pages. Then I went back and after a couple revisions and tweaking the sentence structures of a couple paragraphs and rewording some sentences i realized i just did not like one of my paragraphs so i deleted that whole paragraph from my paper. I was still able to meet the page requirement and without the fluff i feel as if that paragraph added. I liked the paragraph but just not for this type of paper.

Analysis paper first draft

With the first draft i could not expand it to two pages. I don't know why but i couldn't push to that two page requirement. It was only 5 paragraphs so I thought that two pages was ridiculous but then i started thinking about what i could talk about and with the addition of the quote sandwich it was really easy to start expanding my draft.

Snow Day

My snow day was very eventful. It started off as a normal day waking up and going to the gym. Then my friend has a shoulder injury and when I but his shoulder back into place I put it back into the actual position is was supposed to be in which they said would never happen so we had to take him to the ER to get pain medication. Let me tell you Romeoville does not know how to plow roads! The roads were awful and it was an adventure and a half getting to the ER. Then my peer minister ordered us pizza and made the day so much better.

Revising the Doc project

With the help of Dr. Kyburz I was able to revise my paper to what I feel is a pretty good paper. I like the direct criticism so I know exactly what she is looking for so my paper can be better. I learned in high school that you need to write to your audience and having the direct criticism helps me write to my audience and makes me able to write it in a more appropriate manor. 

Writing the doc project

Writing the initial paper for this project was not all that bad and once I got into the film it made it a lot easier to write. I was more engaged in this paper then the last doc project I did. I feel as if having experience on this topic helped making this paper better then my last one. I also feel as if Chasing Coral has many different aspects that all come together and makes a paper easier to write.

Doc Project

1.) The scene that got to me the most was at the end when they showed what coral reefs use to look like and what they look like now because of coral bleaching. It moved me because I honestly had no idea this was even a thing and to see how beautiful something once way compared to now is a tragedy. I feel as if this is an awful thing to be happening as a result of rising ocean temperatures because of global warming and it is almost unknown.

2.) I am very surprised on how quick this happens and that it can happen in a matter of months and they will never come back as they were before.

3.) I want to know if there is anyway to regenerate the coil and have it somehow be biologically altered to become more resistant to changing water temperatures. I still feel almost responsible for this because humans are causing this problem and no one really does anything to try and stop this.

problematic concepts
1.)  how this can be stopped
2.) can we stop this
3.) can we reverse this
4.) can any coral adapt in time to save itself
5.) can we biologically alter the coral